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Post by The Lord on Dec 16, 2008 15:08:32 GMT -5
The hot, blazing mid-day sun, was reflecting it's light onto the, blue, sea. The sand was golden, when you sat down the hot sun, shined on your neck. You could see fishe gliding through the ocean one of these was called Dave. Dave was gliding, swiftly through the sea, he could see lots of vibrant colours which were intriguing. From the sea when he looked up he could the luminous sun reflecting down on him. Dave was exploring the sea, when he saw this fish, it's movement was waving. He had extravagant spots on his back. Dave quickly glided away from him. He saw a pink fish, it was moving elegantly through the ocean. She had these pretty lines on here fins. Dave curiously looked around, he saw a clown fish. It was a vibrant orange! With white spots. The ocean was just wonderful. Dave though to himself. Dave could see all the people, swimming in the ocean. He always held his head high, because he knew he could swim better then them . Suddenly Dave expression changed he saw a, gloomy shark, Dave quickly swam, because to his home, as fast as he could go. He hind in this clam where he lived. This was the only bad thing about the ocean, sharks! Thanks, Ya'll
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Post by Rojo on Dec 16, 2008 15:12:06 GMT -5
1. Work on your spelling. 2. Try less hard on your vocabulary. YOu can really tell you've over-done it. 3. The Sun's not luminous.
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