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Post by The Lord on Dec 9, 2008 15:43:40 GMT -5
 Peace A World Of Peace Will Never Materialise Just Capsize. Guns, weapons, enough to blow up the nation, the world can be a nasty creation. Tony Blair committed crimes again humanity and make people loose there sanity. Loving, caring wheres it all gone? Now it's just one big conn. Iraq is collapsing, can't the Labour party see Well I guess this is my philosophy. BNP with there idiotic ideas Cant you see the childrens tears. Then you got religon dictating how you live Maybe everyone should just stary to give. Guns weapons they destory our world Inside your brain it must start to unfurl. Now you got people telling you what to do Just go to the Gonverment offices and view A World Of Peace Will Never Materialise Just Capsize. Guns, weapons, enough to blow up the nation, the world can be a nasty creation. Thanks!
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Post by Rojo on Dec 9, 2008 15:47:09 GMT -5
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Post by The Lord on Dec 9, 2008 15:48:59 GMT -5
Thanks Jack I'll bring it into school tommorow |
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Post by The Lord on Dec 9, 2008 15:49:11 GMT -5
Woops sorry for the smiles
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Post by Seven on Dec 9, 2008 15:54:09 GMT -5
Your poem is really great! When I was reading it, I found that it sort of has this almost rap-feel to it that makes it fun to say. And the subject of the poem is really great to! I think it's great that you know what's going on with the world and politics. I also wanted to comment on the symmetry of the poem. I liked how the first and last three lines were repeated, it gives it an almost song-like quality to it. I could see why Rojo would recommend you take it to your music teacher to put a tune to it. Good job, and keep writing!
((Gawd. Don't remind me of the smiley faces. Back when we were your age, half of the rping was done in script format with different smiley faces indicating who was speaking. I hated it because it became so confusing who the hell was speaking! *shudders*))
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